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    November 02

    送别

    我把她送到宿舍楼下,我们应是在这里永别了。

    我透过落地玻璃窗,看着她的身影,她走向楼梯,在拐角处消失不见了。

     

    我呆立半晌,就转身离去了。

    走到大路上的时候,手机响了,是她的电话。她说,我看到你了。我停步,转身遥望。她说我在楼上,你看不到我的。我便一路往回走,眼睛一直在寻觅她的倩影。

     

    走过两幢楼房,看到了尽头的那一幢宿舍楼,在第四层,左数第六个阳台上,晾着的杂乱衣物下,我看到了她浅浅的笑。她冲我挥手。我站在楼下,仰望身在四楼的她,她笑得那样天真。楼朝我这个方向一整面都是阳台,一整面墙挤满了豆腐块一样的小隔间,阳台都挂着满满的衣服,还有几个女生点缀着画面,或在欠身,或在洗衣。我就一直看着她和她的阳台。

     

    我身后隔着一条马路便是一块草坪,我走过去坐下,跟她漫无边际地聊着。远远只看到她圆圆的脸,看不清她的眼睛,印象中她是笑着的。我看着她在阳台进进出出。这恐怕是最后一次了。挂电话后,我也不起身,索性就坐在路牙上歇息了。她见我还不走,便入屋拿了样东西出来,她冲我晃晃手里的红袋子,示意要丢下来。我便走近,朝她喊,什么呀?她做了个口形,香蕉。然后就看到红袋子鼓着风,带着一股冲劲就坠了下来,我伸手去接,却扑了个空。砸到地面的香蕉,只有一根还算完整,我就回到刚才的位置,拨开吃了起来。一阵心酸。

     

    她又在阳台进进出出,仿佛偶尔冲着我笑,像一个可爱的小姑娘,像另一个孩子展示自己的宝贝。她又招手示意我过去。此时手里拿了一个长方型纸盒子,我照例喊,什么呀。她没作声,然后又看到一个东西砸将下来。我的心忽然很乱,心想你扔一块砖头下来砸死我算了。还是接不住那盒子,拾起后打开一看,里面是两块柿子饼。

     

    我又回到路牙,坐下来,把香蕉吃完后,捻出一张纸巾包着柿子饼,吃了起来。这时电话响了,她问,好吃么?我说,好吃。吃完一块,另一块却是吃不下了。我问,你什么时候出来?她说,2点吧。我又问,然后就去开会?她说是的。我说,那我就不等你了。

     

    我站起身,背好包,准备走了。回望了她几眼,她也一直在注视我的远去。我便一直往前走,没有再回头。她总问,我们真的分手了么?我总是无法回答她这个问题。然而我们应是在这里永别了。

     

    P.S.

    本文仿鲁迅《伤逝》一文写成。

    刻画女子之纯情与男子之留恋。


    家母评论:

    不够深刻,不够伤痛。男女主角都没心没肺。

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    Echowrote:
    不爽。
    July 4
    蒋大美wrote:
    我是雨静
    Jan. 9
    蒋大美wrote:
    确实没心没肺……
    那什么,要是香蕉和柿子饼换成其它意境的东西,可能也稍有帮助……
    Jan. 9
    韫 salomewrote:
    谢谢支持。
    Nov. 4
    銳 蘇wrote:
    支持你
    Nov. 4

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